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The Departure. by =M-PlayC3ll:iconM-PlayC3ll:



My wood-textured,
suitcase is packed;
filled in with socks,
shirts and pants,

folded around,
space saver.

Zipped with unease,
like a stomach on
thanksgiving or
some other excuse,

delighted by frozen
leftovers.

Friends and family
informed, calmly
reminded that I
choke at small talk,

the weather seldom
changes.

Pets handed to
trusted neighbors,
reluctance on both
smiling ends,

farewell-pats and
purrs.

Keys collected,
gripped for memories
until they leave
doleful marks,

the ever-lingering
final regrets.
©2008 =M-PlayC3ll
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=LilithLairPoetry:iconLilithLairPoetry: May 3, 2008, 9:55:23 PM
Concise, interesting structure, and fits the overall feel of the title. Kinda expected with this kind of situation in which you captured the cautious traveler's only steps out the door. Nice read.

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=M-PlayC3ll:iconM-PlayC3ll: May 4, 2008, 11:23:42 PM
Thank you very much :aww:

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Why, sometimes I've believed as many as six impossible things before breakfast. - Lewis Carroll

I best leave you to your clubbing. Who knows what monstrosities may be in need of beatings and bruises. - ~chocolate-therapy
=LilithLairPoetry:iconLilithLairPoetry: May 5, 2008, 8:48:17 AM
Your welcome.

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Necrophilia, the sudden urge to crack open a cold one!
=M-PlayC3ll:iconM-PlayC3ll: May 5, 2008, 4:45:54 PM
You're :P

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Why, sometimes I've believed as many as six impossible things before breakfast. - Lewis Carroll

I best leave you to your clubbing. Who knows what monstrosities may be in need of beatings and bruises. - ~chocolate-therapy